Essay Refinement

<body topmargin=0 leftmargin=0 marginheight=0 marginwidth=0> <table cellpadding=0 cellspacing=0 border=0><tr> <td valign="top" colspan=2 height=90 BGCOLOR="#FFFFFF" TEXT="#080000" background="005b85a3.jpg"> <div> <FONT SIZE="2" COLOR="#000000" FACE="Arial" ><B>Essay Refinement</B></FONT><B>    </B><B> |     </B><A HREF="index.htm" TARGET="_top" TITLE="Essay Refinement"><B>home</B></A></div> <bR> <bR> <bR> <bR> <div> <B> </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>B.A.in philosophy at UCLA </B></div> <div> <B>M.A. completed credits in philosophy at CSULA </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>Profession: </B></div> <div> <B>educator....creator, developer and co-author with Sharon Sguigna of Studies in Meaning, a critical-creative thinking program </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>former high school teacher of ethics and logic </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>writer of philosophic-wisdom </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>author, with Sharon Sguigna, of Of Pathics and Evil </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>Sharon </B></div> <div> <B>Educational Background </B></div> <div> <B>BA major in English and minor in Spanish  at CSULA</B></div> <div> <B>M.A. completed credits in English at CSULA</B></div> <bR> <div> <B>Profession:</B></div> <div> <B>educator....creator, developer and co-author with Sharon Sguigna of Studies in Meaning, a critical-creative thinking program </B></div> <div> <B>former public schools teacher of English and Spanish </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>co-author, with Joseph Sguigna, of Of Pathics and Evil </B></div> <bR> <bR> <bR> <bR> <bR> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> </div> </td> </tr><tr> <td valign="top" width=210 BGCOLOR="#FFFFFF" TEXT="#080000" background="006d2b83.jpg"> <div> <B><U>Contact</U></B></div> <div> <B>Joseph / Sharon</B></div> <div> <A HREF="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com" TARGET="_top" TITLE="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com"><B><U>thepublicbenefit@gmail.com</U></B></A></div> <div> <B><U> </U></B></div> <div> <B><U>Founders'</U></B><B> </B></div> <div> <B><U>Educational </U></B><B><U>Background</U></B></div> <bR> <div> Joseph</div> <div> BA/MA Philosophy</div> <div> Sharon </div> <div> BA/MA English</div> <bR> <bR> <bR> </td> <td valign="top" height=390 width="100%" BGCOLOR="#FFFFFF" TEXT="#080000"> <bR> <div> <B>Just email us your essay for a free evaluation.</B></div> <div> <A HREF="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com " TARGET="_top" TITLE="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com ">thepublicbenefit@gmail.com </A></div> <bR> <bR> <div> <B> <TABLE BORDER="2" CELLPADDING="2" CELLSPACING="1" WIDTH="399" BORDERCOLORLIGHT="#C0C0C0" BORDERCOLORDARK="#808080" FRAME="BOX" RULES="ALL" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0" > <tR> <tD VALIGN=TOP HEIGHT= 176 ><NOBR><div> <B>ESSAY REFINEMENT</B></div> <div> <IMG BORDER="0" SRC="Symb075c00b7011800000000.png" HEIGHT="19" WIDTH="24" ALIGN="bottom" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0">Professional Educators</div> <div> <IMG BORDER="0" SRC="Symb075c00b7011800000000.png" HEIGHT="19" WIDTH="24" ALIGN="bottom" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0">Proofreading, Editing, Analysis</div> <div> <IMG BORDER="0" SRC="Symb075c00b7011800000000.png" HEIGHT="19" WIDTH="24" ALIGN="bottom" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0">Academic and Professional Essays</div> <div> <IMG BORDER="0" SRC="Symb075c00b7011800000000.png" HEIGHT="19" WIDTH="24" ALIGN="bottom" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0">Online </div> </NOBR></tD> </tR> </TABLE></B></div> <bR> <div> <I><B>We refine high school and college essays thoroughly</B></I></div> <div> <I><B> to students' personal and academic satisfaction.</B></I></div> <bR> <div>  ____________________________________________</div> <bR> <div> The following two student essays display our <I><B>proofreading </B></I><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#330000" FACE="Calibri" >(grammar & usage)</FONT></div> <div>  and <I><B>editing </B></I><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#330000" FACE="Calibri" >(critical analysis) </FONT>process that give an overview of our distinctive </div> <div>  service.<FONT SIZE="4" COLOR="#990000" FACE="Calibri" > </FONT></div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> OUR CORRECTION PROCEDURE </div> <bR> <div> 1. For the sake of clarity (student friendly), we place red brackets around </div> <div>     our corrections or suggestions.</div> <div> 2. For each error, we strike through it with a black line. We correct it in red </div> <div>     and in brackets. </div> <div> 3. For each "needs improvement" we underlline it with a black line. We note </div> <div>     it or may suggest the improvement in red and in brackets.</div> <div> 4. For suggested conciseness, we underline the word, phrase or sentence to </div> <div>     be improved upon.</div> <div> 5. Immediately after an error, or "need improvement," </div> <div> 6. We include an "overall comments" at the end of the essay.</div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B>S</B><B>AMPLE 1</B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#0000FF" FACE="Arial" >  </FONT></div> <div> <B>[ An example of our essay refinement  priced at $27.00] </B></div> <div>  </div> <div> This  essay sample  required <I>mainly </I><B>editing </B>(sequencing,  precision,  </div> <div> conciseness, clarity, semantics - in short, critical analysis) with little </div> <div> emphasis on <B>proofreading </B>(<U>mechanics</U>: grammar, usage, punctuation, </div> <div> spelling, sentence construction, etc.).</div> <bR> <div> <B>PROMPT</B></div> <div> High school student: "I may be using my pen, but I'm not using my mind."</div> <div> <B>Essay Assignment</B>: Do you agree with this assessment of high school education?</div> <div> Write a well-crafted essay in support of your position.</div> <bR> <div> <IMG SRC="0315d810.png" border=0 width="605" height="897" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <IMG SRC="0345dc10.png" border=0 width="605" height="193" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <IMG SRC="0365d940.png" border=0 width="605" height="148" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div>  <FONT SIZE="4" COLOR="#330000" FACE="Calibri" ><B>OVERALL COMMENT:</B></FONT><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#990000" FACE="Calibri" > </FONT>Your writing is fairly clear in what you express; but what </div> <div> you express is somewhat random in trying to make your points. In which case, you </div> <div> did not address the topic's assignment straight-forwardly; which is: students are not </div> <div> being educated to understand what they read and write: too much knowledge, yet so </div> <div> little understanding of that knowledge.</div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B>SAMPLE 2</B></div> <div> <B>[ An example of our essay refinement  priced at $21]</B></div> <bR> <div> This essay required <I>mainly </I><B>proofreading </B>(<U>mechanics</U>:grammar, </div> <div> usage, punctuation, sentence construction, etc.) with little emphasis </div> <div>       on <B>editing </B>(sequencing,  precision, conciseness, idea-sense, - in </div> <div>       short, critical analysis etc.)</div> <bR> <bR> <div> <IMG SRC="01b5de00.png" border=0 width="605" height="736" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <IMG SRC="01c5daa0.png" border=0 width="605" height="426" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <IMG SRC="01d5dd00.png" border=0 width="605" height="464" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <IMG SRC="0217af40.png" border=0 width="634" height="244" ALT="Microsoft Office Word Document" ALIGN="BOTTOM" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></div> <div> <B>OVERALL COMMENT</B>: The development and sense of your theme is fairly good; but, as is evident,</div> <div> that your grammatical and usage ability is below level, leaves little room for attempting to edit your </div> <div> essay. However, by making these corrections, this essay should at least earn an average grade. </div> <div>          _______________________________________________________________</div> <bR> <bR> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B> <TABLE BORDER="2" CELLPADDING="2" CELLSPACING="1" WIDTH="646" BORDERCOLORLIGHT="#C0C0C0" BORDERCOLORDARK="#808080" FRAME="BOX" RULES="ALL" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0" > <tR> <tD VALIGN=TOP HEIGHT= 165 WIDTH="634"><div> ESSAY PROBLEMS:<FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#330000" FACE="Arial" > </FONT></div> <bR> <div> How do I start my essay? <B>| </B>What exactly is my thesis? <B>| </B>How do I support my thesis? <B>|</B> How do I arrange my ideas ? <B>|</B> How can I tell when I go off-topic? <B>| </B>What research do I need for my essay? <B>|</B> How do I end my essay? How do I know that my essay is interesting, convincing, precise, and concise? Have I missed the point?</div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <I><B>Essay Refinement Service</B></I><B> will solve these problems.</B></div> </tD> </tR> </TABLE></B></div> <bR> <bR> <div> <TABLE BORDER="2" CELLPADDING="1" CELLSPACING="1" WIDTH="733" BORDERCOLORLIGHT="#C0C0C0" BORDERCOLORDARK="#808080" FRAME="BOX" RULES="ALL" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0" > <tR> <tD VALIGN=TOP HEIGHT= 1074 WIDTH="723"><bR> <bR> <div> <B>OUR SIX PROCEDURAL STEPS FOR STUDENTS TO FOLLOW</B></div> <div>  </div> <div> <B>First Step:</B> Upon receiving the essay, we evaluate whether it will need proofreading </div> <div> or editing primarily. </div> <div> <B>Second Step:</B> We email the student our evaluation with the fee to be charged. If the</div> <div>  student agrees with the evaluation and fee, payment is made to PayPal on this website. </div> <div> <B>Third Step</B>: We <U>proofread and edit</U> the essay for mechanical analytical issues. </div> <div> <B>Fourth Step: </B>We email the corrected draft to students with a key explaining the error </div> <div> markings.</div> <div> <B>Fifth Step:</B>   if students do not understand any of the corrections, they are to contact us </div> <div> for clarification.</div> <div> <B>Sixth Step:</B>  [OPTIONAL] Students email their final draft to us; we read it and make a final </div> <div> brief comment on it, then return it to the student. </div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B>OUR SERVICE</B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#330000" FACE="Calibri" ><B> </B></FONT></div> <bR> <div> 1. Our guarantee: 24-48 hours or less turn-around (from the time you email us your first draft for</div> <div> corrections to the time we email you the corrected version) </div> <div> 2. Professional degreed writing experts</div> <div> 3. We have been educating students in critical-creative thinking through our <I>Studies in Meaning</I> curriculum for two decades. </div> <div> 4. Our service is organized only by e-mail. Other contacts, such as by phone are freely arranged regarding an introductory or informative call by client, and courtesy call by Essay Refinement Service. </div> <div> 5. We do not rewrite students' essays. </div> <bR> <bR> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B> </B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#3300FF" FACE="Calibri" ><B>OUR PRICING PER ESSAY</B></FONT> </div> <div> <B>NOTE</B>: <FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#993300" FACE="Calibri" ><B>Email your essay to </B></FONT><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#3300FF" FACE="Calibri" ><A HREF="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com" TARGET="_top" TITLE="mailto:thepublicbenefit@gmail.com"><B>thepublicbenefit@gmail.com</B></A></FONT><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#993300" FACE="Calibri" ><B> for our </B></FONT></div> <div> <B>free general evaluation of its needed refinement.</B></div> <div> <B>Payment is due after you accept our evaluation and pricing</B><B>.</B></div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> [PROOFREADING: grammar and usage / EDITING: analytical and creative reasoning]</div> <bR> <div> 1.     <B>Proofreading </B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#0000FF" FACE="Calibri" ><B>(primary)</B></FONT><B> + Editing </B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#0000FF" FACE="Calibri" ><B>(secondary)</B></FONT>: = each 6-page or less essay (double-spaced) = <B>$21.00</B></div> <div> 2.     <B>Editing </B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#0000FF" FACE="Calibri" ><B>(primary)</B></FONT><B> + proofreading </B><FONT SIZE="3" COLOR="#3300FF" FACE="Calibri" ><B>(secondary)</B></FONT>: = each 6-page or less essay (double-spaced) = <B>$27.00</B></div> <bR> <DIV ALIGN="LEFT"></DIV> <div> <B>PAYMENT PROCEDURE</B></div> <bR> <div> <B> <form action="https://www.paypal.com/cgi-bin/webscr" method="post" target="_top"> <input type="hidden" name="cmd" value="_s-xclick"> <input type="hidden" name="hosted_button_id" value="EDJ5YHUZ96U58"> <table> <tr><td><input type="hidden" name="on0" value="Essay Refinement">Essay Refinement</td></tr><tr><td><select name="os0"> <option value="Essay Refinement">Essay Refinement $21.00 USD</option> <option value="Essay Refinement">Essay Refinement $27.00 USD</option> </select> </td></tr> </table> <input type="hidden" name="currency_code" value="USD"> <input type="image" src="https://www.paypalobjects.com/en_US/i/btn/btn_buynowCC_LG.gif" border="0" name="submit" alt="PayPal - The safer, easier way to pay online!"> <img alt="" border="0" src="https://www.paypalobjects.com/en_US/i/scr/pixel.gif" width="1" height="1"> </form>  </B></div> <bR> <div> <B>_______________________________________________________________</B></div> <bR> <bR> </tD> </tR> <tR> <tD VALIGN=TOP HEIGHT= 30 WIDTH="723"><IMG BORDER="0" SRC="1x1.gif" HEIGHT="30" ALIGN="bottom" WIDTH="723" HSPACE="0" VSPACE="0"></tD> </tR> </TABLE></div> <bR> <bR> <bR> </td> </tr></table></body>